It's definitely a vast improvement. Your visual heirarchy and organization is a lot more ordered. You seem to have focused what you're trying to do a bit more. Personally, if you're using text that is a bit more 'natural' than a font like arial etc, then try and work that into the photo. If you're going to center everything it might make more sense to revert back to a normal font. Also your text mgiht need to stand out more in the photo because it gets lost in the black and white, so try some outward glow and bevel effects in whatever program you're using. Lastly i think this is just plain bad luck but the text seems to align with the bottom of the number 8's jersey which kind of throws off the eye a bit...You might want to change the alignment of the text. Just my thoughts...but don't let that get you down, it's actually looking really good now.